Love Sonnet I
She is an angel, radiant and sweet
She comes from heaven and blesses the earth
Without her my heart would no longer beat
I am nothing to her infinite worth
Wherever she walks happiness follows
You behold in her wake a trail of joy
She leaves, I look toward happy tomorrows
My only dream that I could be her boy
In her presence there is an end to strife
At the sight of her the shackled are free
Til’ the end of time I would love my life
If the object of her love would be me
The number of hints I give is one
But the number you find is left at none
Love Sonnet II
What her name is you may never find out
To who she is I’ll speak not a word
The truth is I love her without a doubt
Her spirit is pure, as free as a bird
When she is somber the sky always cries
On the instant she regains her smile
The world glows around her and clears the skies
That which saddened her is condemned as vile
She is a champion of what is right
In my eyes she is the image of love
In her name it is an honor to fight
She is special, my perfect little dove
I would give my life to save this wonder
My love for her is as strong as thunder
Love Sonnet III
My soul sings with love for my fair lady
My heart flutters when she smiles toward me
In heaven where it is brisk and shady
She lives well and does everything with glee
In her company my life is a song
A chorus that carries an upbeat tune
And then nothing in the world can seem wrong
Her face is more brilliant than the moon
Her majesty has only perfect traits
To her character none can be compared
With her love there is nothing that she hates
I would die happy if for me she cared
For eternity I would shed no tears
Her aura washes away all my fears
Love Sonnet IV
Her greatness cannot be expressed by pen
My poet’s heart must try in vain
She humbles even the proudest of men
Her words are softer than a morning rain
The wildest of hearts she renders tame
With her bright light she illuminates all
My care for her is a luminous flame
From salvation this maid never will fall
In her company night turns into day
The light of her fairness never can fade
I am in love with her, come what may
For a love like hers I always prayed
There is one message in this simple rhyme
I will love her until the end of time
Love Sonnet V
She is a flower that is in full bloom
When I dream I see her name in lights
My favorite dream is to be her groom
Because of these dreams I sleep through the nights
When she walks by you can hear angels sing
She is a cherub so cunning and smart
She would be my queen if I were a king
She is sweet and sugary, never tart
If she was not here the planet would die
Her purity is what sustains the world
She can’t know how I feel, I am too shy
My love for her may never be unfurled
A seat beside her would be a throne
But I am doomed to always be alone
Please leave any comments or opinions you have towards my poetry.
posted by Dave @ 6:01 PM
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sonnets! and very good ones too
i've never been able to work in strict poetic confines for when i write about topics like yours, i have to go free-verse b/c i write these thick metaphors that nobody will ever figure out
now left to figure out - who is the subject of zees? and, do i know the person?
unfortunately, you will never know who it is. i left a hint in there somewhere, but even if you knew the answer to the riddle i doubt youd find the start.
what was it I said. Don't quit your day job I think. The poem is a little too cut and dry. And that
"I want to be her boy"
or whatever if the best thing to continue with is that change the line your rhyming it with.
Oh also you should try to go deeper then just. "I love her so much" this is very open ended. It could refurer to anyone. Which adds contradiction because you keep saying how special she is. Of course you've said that its the sappyness that scores the chicks, but I don't really want a chick thats a sap sucker, and it would probably be even more interesting if it was obviously about them.
Eyes of dancing light
Like water to parched lips
My sorrow quenched
hai ku is pretty cool, and you can say it real quick and seem really artsy.
except haiku is also "cut and dry". it's not that im looking specifically for sappiness, it's just that most girls like sappiness. i dont want a girl so shallow and sappy that the the repetition of the word love alone is what hooks her, i just want something to make her happy to read. i dont know what you mean about the rhyming problem. if you're going to post, put them in one post. i mean to be open ended. this way i give no hints to who she is. your haiku, though, is rich with comparisons and artful. too short to hold the emotion i want to portray. sonnets are known as the poetry of love almost exclusively. check out shakespeare, most of his sonnets are sappy, but better than mine.
What I meant was. If you write a line and the best thing you can rhyme it with is "I only want to be her boy" then change the line. By cut and dry I mean there's no hidden meaning. Shakspearian Sonnets are full of those.
In me thou seeith such a time
As when the leaves hand few or none
Something like that anyway. Yes sonnets are the poems of love, but there's more to love then saying you love someone.
Not full of hidden meaning, eh? Maybe you just say that because you don't see it, and I'm not going to tell you. I don't believe seeith is a word, although you have poetic liscense. Ironically the boy rhyme was in the opposite direction. I had that line before the one it was rhymed with. Of course there's more to love than telling the person you love them. Did you actually read them? I said basically just that many times.
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